I appreciate being able to view the poem on a different tab--made it easier to go back and forth from your points to the actual piece ^_^
(I completely agree with point 2. )
The story images from lines 6 to the couplet are my favorite. The swift movements between "their ankles to jello,/...backs kiss the floor, until.../" was a rush. Line 12 was enough space for a breath before the couplet.
I appreciate being able to view the poem on a different tab--made it easier to go back and forth from your points to the actual piece ^_^
(I completely agree with point 2. )
The story images from lines 6 to the couplet are my favorite. The swift movements between "their ankles to jello,/...backs kiss the floor, until.../" was a rush. Line 12 was enough space for a breath before the couplet.